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Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Maxpayne5th » 20 Dec 09, 9:39 pm

(From now on, Quotation Marks ["] mean I am speaking as the main character)

{Trailer}

"High School, Year 12. Heh. What a blast. Everyone in my year picked on me. All 30 of them. They pushed me to the ground. They called me names, said nasty things about me, spread false rumours. This went on for as long as I can remember. Until one day I snapped. I lashed out at the ring leader, that Miguel!"

"They said I was crazy, the others called me nuts. I had to take a psyche evaluation and was deemed unsafe to fit in with society. I was taken to a nearby mental institution."

"That was 10 years ago."

"I'm finally out now, but that matters little. Those doctors may have thought they cured me of all my rage... No... it was just hidden. Quelled until I was able to use this rage to my full potential."

"I just got out, now it is time to exact..."

"My revenge."

//Trailer then shows random killing sequences in game.
//Ends

{Extended Trailer}
{Normal Trailer, then this part}

"30 people. 30 men that had made my life a living hell. I don't even know why they did what they did, but that matters little now. All that matters is that all these people feel the same pain and suffering I once did. Even if it means taking them all to their graves a little earlier than expected."

"I know what has happened to all of them. Some have lived normal lives"
{Trailer shows some people in houses, regular offices, garages, etc.}

"Some have become high profile people, like CEOs, Managers, Celebrities, Sports Stars."
{Trailer shows some people in high rise office buildings, red carpets, baseball park, etc.}

"Others have become bums, gang members, hardened criminals."
{Trailer shows some people on the street, and in prison.}

"It may be tough to get to all of them, but I will use all the skills at my disposal to kill them all."
{Trailer shows main character beating up on some people, using melee weapons including 2x4, a chair leg, a fluorescent light bulb.}

"But I may need something with a bit more firepower, like guns!"
{Trailer shows random weapons being used including pistols, shotguns, silenced sniper rifles and C4.}

"But the only way I'm gonna be able to get that kind of hardware is to befriend some of the local mobsters or gangs."
{Trailer shows main character talking with mafia leader}

"Or I could steal them from various people"
{Trailer shows main character sneaking through a warehouse and pick up an AK-47}

"It doesn't matter how I get my revenge, they all will pay."

"Their heads will roll."
"The pain they feel will be excruciating"
"I will find them and then kill them any way I want."
"This is my revenge, and I will do it any way I like!"

Ok guys, I've been brewing up this idea for a bit. As the story goes, the main character (I'll call him Max, but thats not his official name.) is a kid who grows up in a school in his last year. But these kids are cruel to Max. They do all kinds of things to make him angry, and eventually Max pops and ends up coming at the ring leader, Miguel, with a knife. He lands a cut on his face, but the rest subdue him and he's taken to a mental hospital to get treatment.

The doctors think he's fixed up 10 years later, but hardly is he OK. The only way that his wounds can heal is from the deaths of all 30 people he was bullied by. He wants to make them suffer.

Now this is an open world. You can do whatever you like. Exactly like has been said, this game is supposed to let you kill someone how ever you like. For example, If you wanna get in close and bash his head in, all you have to do is grab one of the many melee weapons, including mundane objects like urns, pots, a fork, etc, and go do it.

Your main objective is to kill everyone in your Year 12 school photo. But it doesn't have to only be that. You can do things like make money by working. What's working you ask? Well that can be anything. Mundane jobs like picking up trash or operating heavy machinery are available as an honest amount of money. You could sign up with the police and get in some action and get paid for it. Maybe get in with one of the mobsters or gangs and get money from there. Maybe just rob people, or banks? Up to you.

Obviously your money is used to get you your weapons. You will be able to get normal weapons from gun dealers around, but the best weapons are on the black market, and can only be accessed if you know where to go. I'm sure all those seedy people know where it is. You can also use money to change yourself cosmetically, different clothes, or even buy things like new cars and the like.

But you might think your a contemptible sneak. Not only can you pickpocket cash off people on the street, you can sneak into people's houses and take their stuff to sell, or even sneak into enemy warehouses and take some guns from their caches.

But all this has its bad points. Say you rob a house, if someone sees you do it, and you leave the scene without doing something about that witness you will gain Notoriety. Pickpocketing or sneaking into someone's house will gain you little notoriety, police will only care if you still in the area. Ditch that place and then some of the heat will die down and you can easily walk the streets.

Things like robbing people with weapons, stealing cars or assaulting someone will gain you medium notoriety. The cops are on high alert, but if you can dodge them long enough, I'm sure they'll eventually give up looking for you.

Murder and use of heavy weaponry will result in large notoriety. The cops know who you are. And they're looking for you. They won't stop till they find you. Only way to kill the heat is with some kind of disguise, or pay one of the crooked cops to provide some false information about the "supposed" killer.

Of course, if there are no witnesses, or video cameras, or the video for the cameras have been taken out, then you need not worry about notoriety, as there is nothing to link you to the crime. Well isn't that just grand?

These 30 people that need to be killed can be done in ANY order. (Except the first one, as he will be part of the tutorial.)

I might have more, but I can't think of anything else at the moment. What do you guys think?
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby titan » 21 Dec 09, 8:10 am

tl;dr.

you're a psycho, this game has already been made, its called Postal.
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Maxpayne5th » 21 Dec 09, 8:35 am

titan wrote:tl;dr.

you're a psycho, this game has already been made, its called Postal.


Lol, yes and no.

Postal was basically taking the piss out of everything. This game would not. This is very serious.

But I agree with the gameplay would be hell bent destruction. But I'd lean this more towards GTA.
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby titan » 21 Dec 09, 8:43 am

GTA has story and some general moral direction.

you're talking about a game where the objective is to kill 30 innocent people for doing something that 95% of kids do in school.
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby André Axe'm » 21 Dec 09, 8:45 am

Classification Refused.

Excessive Violence.

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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Maxpayne5th » 21 Dec 09, 9:21 am

titan wrote:GTA has story and some general moral direction.

you're talking about a game where the objective is to kill 30 innocent people for doing something that 95% of kids do in school.


Innocent you say?

I believe you now when you say "tl;dr" because you obviously didn't read the synopsis. I'll agree my main character isn't a hero fighting for justice, but I wouldn't say that these 30 kids were saints either. Basically, eye for an eye storyline. Maybe I didn't put enough emphasis on the fact that it was these kids that sent him to the crazy house.

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André Axe'm wrote:Classification Refused.

Excessive Violence.

:lol:


Lol, too true.
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby titan » 22 Dec 09, 8:44 pm

nah, kids will be kids, it doesnt mean they deserve to be murdered 25 years later. people are dicks and people a grow up, when you attack someone you're also attacking their loved ones. if you can't understand that, you can't write a story.
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby BarneyGumball » 22 Dec 09, 11:34 pm

Your story might be ok if it were somewhat like Assassin's Creed where Altair:
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where Altair slowly figures out that the cause he thought he was fighting for, was not what he wanted to be fighting for.

I can't see too many people liking a story where you're rewarded for mass murder by "YOU WIN BY BEING A SERIAL KILLER! GG", rather than "That was totally not the way to go about things, they were merely kids who didn't understand the harm they were inflicting".
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby ChainsawMcP » 23 Dec 09, 6:13 am

Maxpayne5th wrote: Basically, eye for an eye storyline.


Ummmm... no

More like "violent and painful death for schoolyard bullying"

Maxpayne5th wrote:Everyone in my year picked on me. ....
They pushed me to the ground. ....
They called me names, said nasty things about me, spread false rumours. ....

But these kids are cruel to Max. They do all kinds of things to make him angry, ....

....and eventually Max pops and ends up coming at the ring leader, Miguel, with a knife. He lands a cut on his face, but the rest subdue him and he's taken to a mental hospital to get treatment.


All you've shown is an unstable character with psychotic urges who has no control, when he escalates out of all proportion to your backstory, and retaliates with a knife.

This isn't a character that normal society will allow to become a hero...

Have a look at the various movies that have already played out your storyline - the killer is not the hero...
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Wyld » 23 Dec 09, 7:04 am

<atkinson>Sounds like a murder simulator to me</atkinson>
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Maxpayne5th » 23 Dec 09, 7:14 am

ChainsawMcP wrote:Have a look at the various movies that have already played out your storyline - the killer is not the hero...


I never said he was a hero.

He's a MAIN CHARACTER!

There's absolutely no heroes in this game.

None.

Your other stuff...

Fair enough. But maybe I need to actually show video of how cruel they were for it to have the right meaning. Text alone isn't enough.

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BarneyGumball wrote:I can't see too many people liking a story where you're rewarded for mass murder by "YOU WIN BY BEING A SERIAL KILLER! GG", rather than "That was totally not the way to go about things, they were merely kids who didn't understand the harm they were inflicting".


Now who said anything about winning.

We're all losers in the end when this happens, aren't we?
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Wyld » 23 Dec 09, 7:21 am

Maxpayne5th wrote:
BarneyGumball wrote:I can't see too many people liking a story where you're rewarded for mass murder by "YOU WIN BY BEING A SERIAL KILLER! GG", rather than "That was totally not the way to go about things, they were merely kids who didn't understand the harm they were inflicting".

Now who said anything about winning.

We're all losers in the end when this happens, aren't we?

Not in a game.

"Revenge" is one of the classic themes, sure.

But think of the games that incorporate a "bad guy doing bad things" .. Postal, Manhunt, etc .. there's a reason why they're shunned from the market as such ..

Sorry to say, but it sounds like a combination of Bully and Manhunt .. and yeah, I don't think that's a game that I want play (personally) or one that the marketplace will embrace, not when there's aliens that need to be killed. ;)
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby Lurk » 23 Dec 09, 11:17 am

is this based on a true story...
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Re: Revenge: A game I just made up in my head!

Unread postby TheScientist » 3 Jan 10, 11:39 am

BarneyGumball wrote:I can't see too many people liking a story where you're rewarded for mass murder by "YOU WIN BY BEING A SERIAL KILLER! GG", rather than "That was totally not the way to go about things, they were merely kids who didn't understand the harm they were inflicting".

^^

sounds like postal vs. manhunt.

manhunt = most disturbing game i've ever played. spent about 5 mins in game and uninstalled it. that poop is just wrong imho, as is above game idea.

not to mention it would give anti-game people an obvious place to blame for high school massacres
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